Loving how the pieces are falling together

This… might have just become my all time favorite series. Holy hell. Bravo.

I'm going to preface this comment by saying that the writing is AMAZING. You're a fantastic author and have immense skill in characterization, scene-setting, and general ability. So nothing about this is personal! :) All that said...welp, it's official. You've written one of the WORST characters I have ever read on this site, and that's saying something! :p But seriously, you've crafted a perfectly detestable villain in Brian. As I said in my comment on the last chapter, he has no excuse for himself--no parental upbringing, no traumatic event in his childhood, no history of powerlessness that makes him seek power. He just genuinely believes that he, as an "alpha," deserves to be on top, and everyone else needs to be beneath him. You brilliantly capture that at the chapter's end--he has a room full of people who will literally do *anything* for him (nice job on calling them "toys!"), and yet the idea that there are three people who won't is enough to make him furious and ruin his fun. It's not enough to have 99.99% of the world in his hand--the notion that a single .01% exists that isn't his is an offense. Having him outright state that he views caring, empathy, and compassion as weaknesses makes him a clear-cut sociopath--one who only cares about himself and experiences nothing for others. And I don't enjoy reading about characters like that. That leads me into my next point: sad to say that while I appreciated the chapter--and the story overall--I didn't *enjoy* it (I confess that I skimmed through most of the sex scenes because the humiliation made me deeply uncomfortable, and the plot elements--especially the set-up at the end of the chapter--also made me unhappy). Speaking frankly, I don't enjoy reading about smug, entitled pricks getting whatever they want; I see too much of that in everyday life. I'm glad that you left a few beacons (good pun!) of hope--perhaps the House will be able to communicate what happened to Tyler (since his initial wish is to "know what's going on"), and as @Drawningghle said, the phrasing of Riley's wish being "my master" suggests that if someone else wishes to take that role, they'll gain invulnerability. But if I may make predictions: I foresee Noah and Joe being tricked into Brian's trap via Riley's altered body, setting up a final confrontation between Tyler and Brian where the former has to make a tough choice (maybe wishing for Riley to become his own slave). I'm aware of my own tastes enough to know that the true disgust that Brian has created for me makes me unlikely to read the rest of the story, at least until I know there's a happy ending involved. It's a testament to just how good you are that you can keep us all hanging! Those are my thoughts, such as they are. Thank you for an excellent story and character study on sociopathy and selfishness. You're an amazing author, Naedre, and you've captivated a lot of people on this site in a way I haven't seen in a long time. Congratulations to you! Even if I don't end up finishing the story, you've made a lot of people happy, gotten a lot of people talking, and sparked a lot of conversations. And I think that that's what the best stories do! :)

This is superbly written, captivating, with amazingly deep characters and a world that feels real and lived in. Not to mention absolutely smolderingly hot! Its the kind of writing I'd expect from a New York Times Bestseller. I'm over the moon with how gripping this story is, as well as inspired and hoping to learn from this story so as to incorporate this level of craftsmenship into my own writing. I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapters.

I personally love how gross a character Brian is. That being said it would be a crime against humanity if he doesn’t get fucked in the ass at some point. oh how humiliating it will be for him.

Omg, I'm really liking the set-up and the story so far. It's a humorous nice change of pace in terms of jocks-nerds relations. I'm personally hoping this can be a big-sub-small-top scenario down the line. But any direction you'll take, I'm sure I'll be able to enjoy it too! This story gives me a good wank this morning after I haven't been on this site for a while. So yeah,thanks for writing! Oh and after reading, my mind cant help but wandered of to this particular comic/Manga by Naop. It showcases the nerd topping the sexy bottom jock. Since was translated from Japanese, reading will be from right to left panel, top to to bottom. Enjoy you guys~ https://myreadingmanga.info/anything-naop-capture-2-eng/

I liked when he told him he loved him. 🥹

extremely promising setup, can't wait for more!!

Ok, I write this knowing it has already been completed so this is just hypothetical speculation…. RILEY IS IRREVERSIBLE SCREWED and no one can do anything about it except him. He, as the others, can opt out of Brian’s wishes, so even IF Brian were to wish him free Riley could, and probably would, opt out of the effects of the wish thus making him Brian’s slave. I’m just thinking out loud. I too want Brian to lose, very badly, in the end….but it will be interesting to see what ultimately happens to Riley regardless

I hope that Brian gets taken down. I really enjoy this story, except him. I want to see Riley rescued and Brian ruined.