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4/2/23, 10:37 PM
I check this story every day and what a reward I finally got! And suggestions you say? Teddy needs to get his dick stuck in Theo's ass, Jon and Teddy need to get their dicks stuck in each other's throats (at the same time even!), and Teddy needs to get Jon's dick stuck in his ass!
4/2/23, 4:12 PM
So super amazing. Like I much prefer dom top pov but I like how he's in control even as he bottoms, cause they are so dumb. Hehe So sexy. So the only thing I would ask as an add is Theo rimming dumb jock ass. I love pov of rimming. Beyond that, yeah, him getting more cock and ass is fun!
4/2/23, 3:10 PM
Simply AMAZING
4/2/23, 3:09 PM
Dude, that was fucking awesome as usual! You surpassed every expectation I had for how Jon would finally figure out how to deal with his horniness, amazing job! Only thing I could suggest forward would be for Jon to figure out how he can "take showers" without wasting too much water because he sweats too much during summer days. Wait until he finds out what roomie can do with his tongue!
4/2/23, 5:06 AM
Like the other commenters I was all ready to see how this tale ended and then vote you Emperor of the Contest. Well, even without that, this is a superb story - hot, sweet, funny, original, delightful in its big strokes and its tiny details! Clearly this is not your first...read-eo...and whenever we get to find out who you are I'll be searching for all your other read-eos, even if they are friggin' accounting textbooks. You, Sir, are a Writer! I'll be standing outside your virtual window cheering each additional chapter!
3/21/23, 12:24 PM
I found this story really hot and a brilliant use of the story branching concept. I do prefer less wholesome endings though. I'd love an alternate ending where the guy's expectation of a boyfriend is changed such that they're all okay just treating Xavier like a cumdump piece of meat. Something like "Anyone who fucks a slut likes seeing them dominated by other tops and will make sure the only thing the slut has to think about is pleasing cock with their holes." I like protagonists getting their lives ruined in nasty ways haha what can I say?

3/22/23, 4:50 AM
@[Dreamweavr](/user/show/883922) Wow, I really appreciate the compliment! 😄 I had fun with the branching aspect... And you know, I definitely enjoy reading bad endings sometimes, but I kinda suck at writing them. I don't think I'd be able to work one into the current story, alas. But if someone else wrote one and posted it, I'd definitely be intrigued and would read it...

3/22/23, 9:44 AM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) I may do that then ;)

3/23/23, 7:04 PM
@[Dreamweavr](/user/show/883922) And I'll be very excited to read it if you do... 👀

3/29/23, 5:26 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) You have enough material that it's practically a twine-based erotic interactive game, it's just that you _would_ need to let people have those bad endings. (And of course adding some art of the key scenes would be nice, but there are interactive non-visual novels on itch.io.) The thing is, you had so many delicious bad endings set up and then you just teleported the POV character away and canceled out every consequence in this final chapter. All you would need to do to write those bad endings is let the consequences you already described happen. Something along the lines of, character feels himself drawn back towards his other self but resists and submits to his transformation into an incubus/toy of an elder God/begs Zeus to actually breed him and let him bear a god baby/becomes the plaything of the regular guys etcetera. Maybe try writing a couple bad endings as practice, because if you don't try you're not going to improve.

Anonymous
3/29/23, 8:31 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) I don’t know if I like the framing of “if you don’t try you’re not going to improve.” If you enjoy bad endings that’s one thing, but it seems pretty clear to me that that wasn’t what the author was going for, nor were they trying to write a traditional “choose your own adventure” story/game. From the very beginning we’re told the “branches” aren’t even branches — they’re all happening simultaneously, in every branch, as a result of the Auntie Woddin tattoo fighting for dominance with the slut seal. Having ANY route end in a full, final, game-like way wouldn’t work that well with the structure of the story. So, I don’t know, if someone writes some slut brand fanfic with “bad endings” I’d probably read it, but a story’s ending not working for you doesn’t mean it failed, or that the author needs to “improve” or is incapable of writing bad endings. Maybe they just didn’t want to, and having a different taste in smut or storytelling is, imo, perfectly fine

3/30/23, 2:35 PM
@Anonymous Yes, I know this probably wasn't directed toward me, but I totally like and respect the authors choices here and wasn't trying to suggest they _(should have)_ done anything differently. In fact using this format for something that specifically is NOT a choose your own adventure I really liked. Just that my tastes lean toward less wholesome endings.

4/2/23, 4:11 AM
@[Dreamweavr](/user/show/883922) Yes, no worries, I understood completely! 😊 And thank you for your kind words! It's high praise to hear that you enjoyed this story so much that it left you wanting more, and thinking of alternative scenarios! I like your writing a lot, too, so seeing your spin on things would be very neat to me. 

@Anonymous Thank you for articulating this better than I could have. 😅 I appreciate it! 

@Nocturne Truthfully, self-deprecating comments aside, I don't really have much trouble writing bad endings... I didn't do bad endings here because I could see it wasn't right for the story I wanted to tell. Me adding them into the story would feel awkward and forced to me, and would get in the way of the larger story structure I was interested in building. However: I'm always thrilled when another author says that something I wrote got their imagination spinning! Like I said to Dreamweavr, I'm flattered he even considered doing his own take on things. (No pressure to actually follow through, of course, Dreamweavr! Just saying I appreciate the sentiment.)
Anonymous
4/1/23, 7:57 AM
This chapter is perfect!! Really, I love the way heaven doesn't mind Father-Son sex so much as it's needed to be rooted in love. I'm very excited to see how this will go. Really do hope Blake can save his father with some loving sex!!!
3/20/23, 5:13 AM
If his ankles are at his ears, his toes wouldn't be pointing at the ceiling. Speaking from experience.

3/20/23, 6:11 PM
@[PEN15LUVR](/user/show/1012360) My toes tend to curl up when I'm in that position — my fault for creating an unclear image. 😅 I might put in an edit it for clarity.

4/1/23, 4:36 AM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) Time to reference your trusty *Erotic Geometry and You! A Guide for Bending in the Bedroom*. I assume you’ve studied it carefully, because the action here is pentagramatically delightful.
Mu
4/1/23, 3:44 AM
I need a spin off of these characters. The daddy is so hot
Nutiper
4/1/23, 1:51 AM
Whew. One of my favorite parts of this chapter is the way you've taken a recently-popularized trend on the site—aka, self-lubricating butts—and done a spin on it that feels distinctive and somehow *intimate*. Like, *romantic* butt-lube... The fact that Carter describes it to himself as 'the lube my body had made *for* my buddy Brook'... Or the way Carter shivers and reacts to the feeling of cold air hitting his lubed hole, and seems viscerally affected by the sensations... Or the way its pheromone-laden scent 'bursts into the air like a spray of cologne' and causes Brook to be even *more* turned on and growly as he's making out with Carter... Butt-lube as eros. I love it. Let me put *that* on my next Valentine card... As other commenters have said, I'm really excited to read the remaining chapters when the contest is over! This story is fantastic, and incredibly fun.